This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note… some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Kia ora Divontae, Zoey here from Gilberthorpe School. I love your story but there are a few mistakes that I noticed when I was reading. Maybe next time you could read it through and see whether it makes sense and maybe you could use capitals. Blog Ya Later!!
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say. Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or Ask a question you want to know more about.
Hello DIVONTAE Tyler here from Gilberthorpes School.
ReplyDeleteI like how you made the story creepy.
But next time put capitals!!!
hi tyler spence hi
DeleteKia ora Divontae, Zoey here from Gilberthorpe School.
ReplyDeleteI love your story but there are a few mistakes that I noticed when I was reading.
Maybe next time you could read it through and see whether it makes sense and maybe you could use capitals.
Blog Ya Later!!
hi tylers girlfriend
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